避免使用过多名词和弱动词的句子

撰写英文文章时,要避免写出塞满名词的句子。 只要删除一些不必要的名词,并把其他的名词改写成形容词,我们就能使句子变得清楚、简洁。 例如:

劣:This method has the advantage of accuracy but the disadvantage of slowness．

佳:This method is accurate but slow．

假如可以使用动词来表达句子的意思,则应该避免使用名词。 如果可以用子句来表达,则应该避免使用名词片语或一长串介系词片语。 例如:

劣:This problem is caused by the lack of consideration of the effect of the bandwidth gain that results from the termination request．

这个句子的主要动词后面紧跟着很长的介系词片语(由3 个介系词片语组成),最后一个介系词片语还包含一个关系子句。 此外,该句子中出现了5 个名词:lack, consideration,effect, bandwidth 以及gain,让人很难理解意思。 因此,我们至少应该把一个名词改成动词,并改写整个句子,以便省略介系词片语。 用不定词to consider 取代名词consideration,并以failure 取代lack。 此外,还可以用动状词resulting 取代that results。 例如:

修改后:This problem is caused by the failure to consider the effect of the bandwidth gain resulting from the termination request．

这个句子比原句要简洁,但是仍然塞满了名词。 因此,可以考虑把名词failure 改成动词fail,同时把动词后面冗长的介系词片语改成一个附属子句,而且把被动式的主要动词改成主动动词。 下面是两种修改方式:

This problem occurs because we failed to consider the effect of the bandwidth gain resulting from the termination request．(https://www.xing528.com)

This problem occurs because the proposed model fails to consider the effect of the bandwidth gain resulting from the termination request．

最后,应该考虑名词effect 对于整个句子意思而言,是不是一个不可或缺的词。 这个名词可能是累赘的,如果是的话,我们只要省略之,就可以进一步简化。 例如:

修正句:This problem occurs because we failed to consider the bandwidth gain resulting from the termination request．

修正句:This problem occurs because the proposed model fails to consider the bandwidth gain resulting from the termination request．

此外,还可以用neglect 这个动词来取代上面句子中的fail to consider。 例如:

修正句:This problem occurs because we neglected the bandwidth gain resulting from the termination request．

修正句:This problem occurs because the proposed model neglected the bandwidth gain resulting from the termination request．