避免使用过多名词和弱动词的句子

撰写英文文章时,要避免写出塞满名词的句子。 只要删除一些不必要的名词,并把其他的名词改写成形容词,我们就能使句子变得清楚、简洁。 例如:

劣:This method has the advantage of accuracy but the disadvantage of slowness．

佳:This method is accurate but slow．

假如可以使用动词来表达句子的意思,则应该避免使用名词。 如果可以用子句来表达,则应该避免使用名词片语或一长串介系词片语。 例如:

劣:This problem is caused by the lack of consideration of the effect of the bandwidth gain that results from the termination request．

这个句子的主要动词后面紧跟着很长的介系词片语(由3 个介系词片语组成),最后一个介系词片语还包含一个关系子句。 此外,该句子中出现了5 个名词:lack, consideration,effect, bandwidth 以及gain,让人很难理解意思。 因此,我们至少应该把一个名词改成动词,并改写整个句子,以便省略介系词片语。 用不定词to consider 取代名词consideration,并以failure 取代lack。 此外,还可以用动状词resulting 取代that results。 例如:

修改后:This problem is caused by the failure to consider the effect of the bandwidth gain resulting from the termination request．

这个句子比原句要简洁,但是仍然塞满了名词。 因此,可以考虑把名词failure 改成动词fail,同时把动词后面冗长的介系词片语改成一个附属子句,而且把被动式的主要动词改成主动动词。 下面是两种修改方式:

This problem occurs because we failed to consider the effect of the bandwidth gain resulting from the termination request．(www.xing528.com)

This problem occurs because the proposed model fails to consider the effect of the bandwidth gain resulting from the termination request．

最后,应该考虑名词effect 对于整个句子意思而言,是不是一个不可或缺的词。 这个名词可能是累赘的,如果是的话,我们只要省略之,就可以进一步简化。 例如:

修正句:This problem occurs because we failed to consider the bandwidth gain resulting from the termination request．

修正句:This problem occurs because the proposed model fails to consider the bandwidth gain resulting from the termination request．

此外,还可以用neglect 这个动词来取代上面句子中的fail to consider。 例如:

修正句:This problem occurs because we neglected the bandwidth gain resulting from the termination request．

修正句:This problem occurs because the proposed model neglected the bandwidth gain resulting from the termination request．